5月6日大作文范文——未成年人犯法是否该受同样惩罚

2017年5月6日雅思大作文题目

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

青少年犯罪是全球性的话题，大家都在思考：为什么青少年会犯罪？为什么青少年犯罪逐年增加？青少年犯罪后到底该如何惩罚？这些话题也都是雅思考试中的热门话题。唐老师总结了一下近几年雅思作文中关于犯罪的话题，列举如下：

2015/4/25；2015/6/18; 2013/11/9（3次）

青少年犯罪是否该受到与成年人一样的惩罚？

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

2015/8/8

 

请改造过后的犯人给学生讲犯罪的危害，可否？

 

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?

 

2015/8/29; 2012/11/3（2次）

我们已经没有办法阻止犯罪吗？

 

People are afraid to leave their homes for fear of crimes. Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crimes while others think that little could be done. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

 

2014/8/2; 2010/8/5（2次）

 

儿童犯罪增多的原因，怎样处罚他们？

 

Children are committing more crimes. What are the causes? How to punish them?

 

 

2014/11/8

犯罪的原因到底是社会原因还是人性原因？

 

Some think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Other believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

2012/5/12

 

还有比监狱更好的办法来解决犯罪问题吗？

 

In most countries, prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

2016/1/14

 

青少年损坏公物后被罚扫街，这种处罚合适吗？

 

A recent newspaper article report that a 14 years old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of being sent to the prison, Do you think this is right, or the young criminals should be sent to the jail? 

 

回到本次考试，问的是青少年犯罪后是否应该受到与成年人同样的惩罚？这个考题在近几年出现过3次，分别是2013年11月9日，2015年4月25日，2015年6月18日。另外，2016年1月14日的考题也与这个话题十分相似。关于如何惩罚青少年罪犯的话题，无非都是围绕着是否应该把他们关进监狱，他们得到惩罚，受到教育，从而变成一个更好的公民，其他的办法无非是让他们免费做义工，让他们在学习中改正错误。

 

很多同学很害怕犯罪话题，总觉得这个话题比较抽象，难以论证。事实上，唐老师认为，雅思考试中，无论面对哪个话题，烤鸭都应该在审题过程中，多想想这个话题与我们的日常生活有什么关联（包括衣食住行，学习，友谊，交流等），而不是将话题引向高深的哲学或者某个专业领域。以这种方法，我们就会发现，没有哪个雅思话题是远离我们生活的，我们都能顺利找到入题的方法。唐老师就以本题为例，告诉大家，一个貌似高深的犯罪话题，如何可以轻松论证，四两拨千斤，得到自己理想的分数。

 

 

面对本次考试题目（乃至犯罪话题），即年轻人犯罪是否该受到与成年人同样的惩罚，多数同学时间想到的可能是：应该，因为这体现了社会公正；或者，不应该，因为青少年应该给机会改过自新。然后就开始冥思苦想，怎么论证这个社会公正问题，或者青少年如何改过自新的问题。这种思维方式，就把你的写作带入到了一个艰难的死胡同，最痛苦的情况可能是一条无法走出的死胡同。比如：社会公正问题论证起来，远不是一般同学可以用英语做到的（即使用汉语都有问题），于是，这样的同学就开始哀叹：这个题目真太难写了！但是，事实是这样吗？非也，事实是你的思维出了毛病：你没有真正把握住题目要求，也没有掌握雅思写作的正确思维方式！那么，如何转换这个思维方式呢？我们是否可以这样思考：青少年罪犯如果受到与成年人同样的处罚（比如关进监狱），对青少年是好还是坏？对这个社会是好还是坏？这样一思考，我们就有话可说了。受到同样处罚，有利于青少年尽快认识错误，改过自新，从而对整个社会也有好处；如果从轻处罚，青少年则难以吸取教训，对他们的未来不利，对社会的安全也不利。这样写，你不仅避免了社会公正这样抽象的死胡同，也会觉得250个字的空间太小了！

 

7分范文

It is argued that, when a teenager commits a crime, even a serious crime such as robbery or sexual molestation, he should not be given the same punishment as an adult criminal. Instead of being put into prison, as these people would suggest, the young criminal should be ordered to do some community services so that they can learn from their mistakes. Quite contrary to this popular belief, I think all criminals, no matter how young they are, should be put into jail and how long they should stay there depends on the severity of their crime.

 

Firstly, prison is a good place for young people to think again what wrong they have done to other people. When put into jail, the young people will have little to do but read and think about their past. There are also many people who will help the young people understand why what they have done before is not socially acceptable. In this way, these young criminals will have a better chance to come back to normal life. On the contrary, if they are just ordered to community services, they may very likely end up repeating their mistakes.

 

Secondly, for these young criminals, their experience in prison may help prevent them from committing more crimes. Once they have been put into jail, they will never forget this experience. So, next time when they think of doing anything wrong, their memory of the prison will immediately return and then they may stop. The memory of doing community services, I believe, does not have this function.

 

Therefore, my opinion is that, like an adult law violator, the teenager should also go to prison when he commits serious crimes because this experience in prison may enable them to become a better person. Other forms of punishment may be useful, yet I do not think they are as effective as prison.       

 

 

老师笔记

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It is argued that, when a teenager commits a crime, even a serious crime such as robbery or sexual molestation, he should not be given the same punishment as an adult criminal. Instead of being put into prison, as these people would suggest, the young criminal should be ordered to do some community services so that they can learn from their mistakes. Quite contrary to this popular belief, I think all criminals, no matter how young they are, should be put into jail and how long they should stay there depends on the severity of their crime.

 

有些人认为，当青少年犯罪，即使是诸如抢劫和性骚扰等很严重的罪行，他们不应该与成年罪犯受到同样的惩罚。这些人会说，不要把年轻罪犯关进监狱，而应该命令他们做一些社区服务工作，这样他们就能从错误中学习。与这个普遍的看法相反，我认为所有的罪犯，无论年龄多小，都应该关进监狱，而在监狱关多久取决于罪行的严重程度。

（1）开头段引出话题和观点。

（2）It is argued that... 有人认为......

（3）Instead of 不是......

（4）Quite contrary to this popular belief... 与这个普遍观点相反的是......

（5）Depend on 取决于......

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Firstly, prison is a good place for young people to think again what wrong they have done to other people. When put into jail, the young people will have little to do but read and think about their past. There are also many people who will help the young people understand why what they have done before is not socially acceptable. In this way, these young criminals will have a better chance to come back to normal life. On the contrary, if they are just ordered to community services, they may very likely end up repeating their mistakes.

 

首先，对于年轻人来说，监狱是个很好的地方来让他们反思对其他所做下的错事。一旦进入监狱，这些年轻人没有什么事干，只能读书并思考其过去。当然，还有许多人去帮助这些年轻人明白为什么他们的所作所为是社会所不允许的。这样，这些年轻的罪犯就更有机会回归正常生活。相反，如果仅仅命令他们做社区服务工作，他们完全可能重蹈覆辙。

（1）本段讨论原因一：监狱是青少年罪犯反思的好地方。注意论证逻辑：监狱是让年轻犯人思考的好地方--监狱里，他们有时间学习和思考--监狱里还有人帮助他们认识到错误--这样，他们就有机会重新回归正常--如果不这样，他们可能重蹈覆辙。【是不是很简单清晰的论证逻辑？】

（2）When put into prison, the young people will have nothing to do but read and think about their past. 这句中的put into prison是过去分词短语，做时间状语。如果写成这样也是可以的：When they are put into prison, the young people will...

（3）Come back to normal life 回归正常生活。

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Secondly, for these young criminals, their experience in prison may help prevent them from committing more crimes. Once they have been put into jail, they will never forget this experience. So, next time when they think of doing anything wrong, their memory of the prison will immediately return and then they may stop. The memory of doing community services, I believe, does not have this function.

 

其次，对这些年轻的罪犯来说，监狱里的经历会帮助他们避免犯更多罪行。一旦他们进入监狱，他们将永难忘记这段经历。于是，下次当他们想做坏事时，监狱的记忆就会立刻浮现，这样他们也许就住手了。我相信，做社区服务工作的记忆很难有这样的功能。

（1）本段讨论原因之二：监狱经历对年轻犯人的心理影响。

（2）commit more crimes 犯更多罪行

（3）Think of doing... 想做......

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Therefore, my opinion is that, like an adult law violator, the teenager should also go to prison when he commits serious crimes because this experience in prison may enable them to become a better person. Other forms of punishment may be useful, yet I do not think they are as effective as prison.

 

因此，我的看法是，青少年如果犯下严重罪行，就应该与成年罪犯一样关进监狱，因为监狱的经历会让他们成为更好的人。其他惩罚方式也许有用，但我认为都没有监狱那么有效果。

（1）本段为结论段，重申观点。

（2）Law violator 犯法的人

（3）enable them to do...使他们能够做......