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写大作文的时候，有时会遇到思路不清晰，不顺利的情况。这是为什么呢？笔者教个性化写作，我想提出一种适合个性化辅导的浅显适用解释和解决方法。

我拿2016年10月8日的大作文来举个例子

Some people think libraries are a waste of money because nowadays people can use the internet to search for information. To what extent do you agree?

这个题比较特别，在它前后的几次考试题目的可以说都是很怪癖的（外星人），它显得十分温和浅显，一目了然，不言自明。“在电脑和网络如此发达的今天，图书馆还有必要存在吗”，解题思路也简单，不会过于奇特（电脑网络当然比图书馆方便了，图书馆找个资料很麻烦。另外，图书馆晚上要关门，或者太远了。 图书馆的好处，比较安静）。但此时如果因为题目简单，就写几个关键词，马上开始作文，文章效果并不一定好。

因为，这时你会把精力都集中在堆砌辞藻的时候，往往会突然发现，思路并不顺畅。因为，你其实并没有想清楚（但你不知道）。另外，你太急于把语言提高到很高的层次，然而大脑并没有准备好。我的建议是，无论想法再简单，也要先用简单的话说出来，比如

Library is not as efficient as computer. if a man wants to get one piece of knowledge and he chooses the library, he will have to use the complex system to look for information, to find the actual book and passage. But if he chooses the computer what he has to do is simpler. he type in his question and he will get the answer.

Another thing is that library not open at night, and sometimes it is too far for everyone to reach, but the internet is every day available and easy to reach.

but library is better in other aspect. it is quieter, and no body talks to you. But if you are using the computer, someone may come to you and disturb you. And advertisement can be very big trouble.

有了这个比较清晰的思路，另外大脑也稍微准备好一点了，我们就试着根据既定方向，换一下表达，让句子写的更好一点。

Computers, combined with internet, excel in almost every technical aspect in our interaction with knowledge. Such excellence is evident when the comparison is made with traditional libraries when it comes to, for instance, information searching. In a traditional library one is expected to take do strenuous job in accurately locating one particular item in an immense catalogue. And there are chances that the time-consuming work would turn out fruitless and thus the stakes are high. Computers, one the other hand, condense the procedure into one flash of digital processing as one conveniently submits an entry of a possibly vague idea, to which countless pre-valued reference await to answer.

Another point of credit is that computer/internet-based library has eliminated the problem of inaccessibility that physical library often poses. Geographical and time limits are no doubt an apparent drawback for traditional libraries whereas the gate to the internet high way for knowledge far-reaching and open and clear in almost all weathers and conditions.

But if we pause to think, is there any merit of the library of the past at all? I think it should be just to say that there is. It retains the solemnity of knowledge as norms and rules are strictly abided by to maintain respectful and comfortable moments of silent intellectual conversation. By contrast, it is often the case, when using the computer, that a tolerable reading environment could be contingent since one is subject to online commercial disturbance.

此方法有利于大脑预热和整理出确保可行的思路。

这个方法，也可以用于教学中，下面我们看一些学生提供的稿样。题目是：

Some people say that to learn a foreign country better people should go to the country, while others say people can just use the internet. Discuss both sides.

以下是w同学迅速用简单的句子写出的，大概用了3分钟。 语法不用纠结：

Actually, it is cheap and convenient to learn foreign culture from the internet. Because we not need to pay. In addition, if a person travel abroad the weather may affect him. Furthermore, we can gain better information from the internet because it mix points of many people.

然后我让学生尽量按照这个思路改写这个段落，这当然耗时久一点：

Actually, it is cheap and convenient to learn foreign culture from the internet. By that I mean when people travel abroad, not only they have to pay for transportation and accommodation, but also would be affected by terrible weather, such as rain. Furthermore, the internet is able to provide accurate information which mixes different opinions of different individuals. By contrast, people may only gain his own view if they travel by himself.

语言看起来还是有进步的，思路和结构也比较清晰。长期坚持练习，有利于促进学生思路和思维的连贯，以及语言提升。呜呼哀哉。

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